[1]
Location: Chapter 2, opening cutscene
Reasoning: Awkward wording on the middle sentence.
Alternative: "But what can you do, Sir Bresby? You've been branded an outlaw who's disgraced the Empire's dignity. Even Prince Mageron has turned on you."

[2]
Location: Chapter 2, opening cutscene
Reasoning: The first half of the line makes sense, but I'm not sure what the second is supposed to say. What does 'avoiding your own authority' mean? I'll posit an alternative but I might want a translator on hand for this one just to be safe.
Alternative: "The possessor of power will be enslaved by the power he possesses...and will be forced to exert his authority on those around him."

[3]
Location: Chapter 2, Destonia HQ
Reasoning: Generally stiff ending.
Alternative: "The Empire is my home, but I've lost confidence in my country after witnessing its social injustice myself."

[4]
Location: Encyclopedia
Reasoning: This line gets cut off if you scroll up to it from Arrawnt's entry. (Oddly it reads 'army' normally, but is still missing the period.)
Alternative: "...the Synbios army." If more space is needed, swap out 'become' with 'form', but even this might not work if the player's character name is too long.

[5]
Location: Encyclopedia
Reasoning: Again, an awkward cutoff, but I have no clue why this one happens.
Alternative: "...the Medion army."

[6]
Location: Encyclopedia
Reasoning: 'Whereabouts' is a plural, not a singular.
Alternative: "...his whereabouts are unknown."

[7]
Location: Encyclopedia
Reasoning: There's something weird going on with the name display. His name reads 'Fafhar' when it's the bottom entry, but when you scroll further down it fixes itself and becomes Fafhard again. Also missing a period at the end of the entry.
Alternative: "Fafhard" "...by Fiale's hand."

[8]
Location: Encyclopedia
Reasoning: "Muddled" is a strange word choice, and the first sentence ends awkwardly. Tense trouble in the second sentence.
Alternative: "Forest elf summoner charmed by the Bulzome Sect to punish her lover David for rejecting them. She overcames the spell with help from the Medion army, and joined them."

[9]
Location: Encyclopedia
Reasoning: Desperately needs a comma. If you tried to read this sentence without taking a breath, you'd pass out. (Also applies to the entries for Jason and Romaterra.)
Alternative: "...of Lord Cyos of Swampland, who challenged the Imperial invasion..."

[10]
Location: Encyclopedia
Reasoning: Tense slipup on the middle sentence.
Alternative: "...bandits discovered her hiding in Railhead."

[11]
Location: Encyclopedia
Reasoning: Second half of the last sentence is clumsy. Tense confusion.
Alternative: "Republican general who stole a ship in Anafect. Battled the Medion army on the dock, but felt indebted to them after they spared the live of his love, Stella."

There's generally a lot of tense slipups in the Encyclopedia, with events being listed in present tense rather than past. This might just need a full lookover rather than me pointing out them out one by one.

[12]
Location: Destonia Weapon Store
Reasoning: Second half of the sentence is awkward.
Alternative: "I don't mean to get in your business, but once you're done shopping you should get out of the city."

[13]
Location: Battle 5, advice screen
Reasoning: There are multiple bridges involved, so this comment probably shouldn't be singular.
Alternative: "The bridges are damaged, so be careful as you cross, Julian."

[14]
Location: Battle 5, post-battle cutscene
Reasoning: Doesn't make sense in the context - the cave they wanted to pass through has just been blocked off, but Cyclops is talking as if the cave is somehow incorrect?
Alternative: "This can't be...the cave entrance-!"

[15]
Location: Battle 6, pre-battle cutscene
Reasoning: Could use a comma to separate the clauses and make it a little easier to read.
Alternative: "It is said this place is cursed, and death awaits those who disturb the graves."

[16]
Location: Battle 6, pre-battle cutscene
Reasoning: Unnatural phrasing and generally a little confusing.
Alternative: "Since Destonia's capture, the Bulzome Sect have been using the dragons here to keep invaders from reaching the castle."

[17]
Location: Foothill HQ
Reasoning: There's something strange happening with the dragon counting here. After recruiting the three green dragons in battle 6, I reloaded to see what changes across runs.
Talk to Thousand -> 3 dragons at base, counted correctly
Cyclops defeats Thousand -> 3 dragons at base, counted correctly
Thousand dies -> 3 dragons at base, but Cyclops lists it as 4???
Alternative: Tweak whatever part of the counting code messes up here??

[18]
Location: Foothill Smithy
Reasoning: Meandering text.
Alternative: "Metal is being refined by machines now, but it still takes a blacksmith's hammer to reveal its true potential."

[19]
Location: Foothill
Reasoning: Odd wording, and the last line in particular is off.
Alternative: "There's a steam engine in town. It moves wheels by boiling hot water. I'm not kidding! It's real!"

[20]
Location: Battle 7, pre-battle cutscene
Reasoning: First half of the sentence is ambiguous. Did Leon use the permit at both these locations, or is the border checkpoint AT Barrier Fortress? I'd assume it's the latter because there's no way Julian's army has legal exit permits, but in that case the sentence is overwrought.
Alternative: "Using a fake exit permit to try and sneak through the border checkpoint...Were you planning to flee the country?"

[21]
Location: Battle 7
Reasoning: Second half generally feels unnatural.
Alternative: "I thought I was doomed, but now I have a chance to stay alive. I'll do my best to hold on!"

[22]
Location: Battle 7 - Leon death message
Reasoning: "Am I dying" is a question and needs a question mark. Also 'meet in battle' is a bit ambiguous, because typically you meet your -enemy- in battle.
Alternative: "Guh...Am I dying...? I...I finally catch up with the Julian army, only to die like a dog on the battlefield..."

[23]
Location: Battle 7 - Leon death message
Reasoning: First sentence reads awkwardly, and between this and [22] the word 'death' is very overused.
Alternative: "Let me warn you while I still can. The fortress' defenses are very powerful."

[24]
Location: Battle 7 - Leon death message
Reasoning: A bit too vague. I assume he means that he deserves to die horribly given all the crimes he's committed, but there's been too much dialogue since [22] for the connection to be obvious.
Alternative: "I guess it makes sense that a miserable life...would end in a miserable death..."

[25]
Location: Status Menu
Reasoning: The description for the Magic Ring is too long and overflows the window. Also both the top menu and the item description are misaligned. Unsure if this is an emulation error?
Alternative: "Ring - 4 elemental res. +5, regen 10 MP if used"

[26]
Location: Battle 8, pre-fight cutscene
Reasoning: Long and meandering sentence.
Alternative: "If I could, Bresby, I'd show you far more respect than the Imperial leadership did for saving the capital. But it's more complicated than that."

[27]
Location: Battle 8, advice screen
Reasoning: The first advice should be future tense (since it's advice for a thing that hasn't happened yet) and refer to the fort's multiple cannons. Second half of the second sentence is passive. Also Defenda isn't a lord, he's a general.
Alternative: "Donhort's force will man the cannons. If they can take down the castle gate, the only defense left will be the general's garrison."

[28]
Location: Battle 8, when the gate is destroyed
Reasoning: "so few opponents" feels a bit unnatural here.
Alternative: "Damn! Why is my army struggling against such a meager force?"

[29]
Location: Battle 8, post-fight cutscene
Reasoning: The word 'general' shows up far too often in this sentence.
Alternative: "Defenda was one of the finest generals the Empire has ever known."


